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To day we had to finish off a writing and we have to edit and re-craft our writing when we're finished it. We help we had the right about the picture that we were given and you could use a story starter if you wanted to but you don't have to if you don't want to
Mysterious Rattling Bag
“It's valentine's day '' Dan said happily with excitement! He went out to the store stepping in deep puddles full of murky water as the rain poured heavily. Dan bought his lovely girl friend some Chocolate Shaped like love hearts and put them in the paper bag.
Dan got home and the bag started to rattle and hissing he was a bit freaked out but he was refusing to look at it. He was greeted by a wet door and he put the key in. Dan went to the living room and handed her the paper bag. It was a bit heavier than expected. She opened it and it led her to…To only one chocolate but when she looked underneath the hot pink box of chocolates she saw a rattlesnake! That jumped down in shock squirming up the stairs.
Dan and Jess freaked out and called animal control. It was a thunderstorm so they couldn't make it which was really unfortunate for Dan and Jess. The huge python started eating everything it grew and grew. It started to slow down and shiver. It came at them with an urgent rush of hunger. It lunged at Jess smashing into the wall but Dan battered it with a frying pan putting it out of its misery Dan and Jess celebrate wish relief and say can carry on with Valentine's day.
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